Assignment One Critique. . . Initial thought processes and ideas


This picture is an example of an image that didn't even make it to the first critique. Even though I thought it portrayed a good serif "S," at first glance the letter dominating is a "T" in the upper left.







Here is another first cut example rejected because it does not portray a serif L, but instead has equal line width all the way through like in Univers.












These were the images used for "L" in the first critique. The image as a whole confused people. I initially wanted the "L" to be seen as the background of the image that is in focus. I did not realize till I hung the image up in class that the blurry foreground makes an "L" as well. I still like the subject used for the "L", but new after critique that a new picture needed to be taken.



For this image of an "S" the white triangle at the upper right was voted as pretty distracting by the class. Initially I thought it made for an interesting image, but after thought I did realize how it took away from the purpose of the photo. Because of this, I choose to use the same photo, but re-crop it. One part of the photo that did work was the use of sheet music in the negative space to help convey my message.



I think this initial image was successful. The use of part of an instrument worked well. I did learn however to not manipulate my font, but rather keep it in its original scale!

This first critique was a huge learning process I am grateful we had because the assignment and expectations were defined much more clearly. Instead of conveying a concept, I conveyed an idea. I did not offer any visual of what it is about music that defines me. I also did not take into consideration the composition of the text underneath the image as supporting information for my concept.


Through my sketchbook I dug deeper with my idea to create a concept. I played with the ideas of conveying pulse and rhythm alongside with my "upbeat" personality, but what really represented me was my passionate personality for the arts. When I do play my horn, I live for the the musical moments that transform you into another state, the energy that creeps up your spine and takes over your entire being while flowing through your veins. I knew that I needed to show this power through use of large text that flows into each other. In addition, my pictures created the narrative of the musical process. The first picture is the latch on my case, the next of my lyre with music in it, and thirdly the triggers on my horn. This shows the process of getting out the instrument, looking at the music, and then executing. This reflects my work ethic that I have learned from music, as well as other forms of art. There is a lot of work and logic that goes behind final products, but the benefits are what keep you persevering. There are times when you want to call it quits, but you have to keep getting the instrument out, keep digging deep into the music, keep playing even when your lips are shot, because when you reach the peak of that musical moment, every second of sweat becomes worth it. This process is reflected in all areas of life, including this class.